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Max - Long-lined version by ~Elf-Prosetry:iconElf-Prosetry:





You, with your unyielding schedule. Can't be late, can't wait for me.

Thirty seconds late? Too bad.

You see me running, calling to you. You know how much I rely on you,
and still you choose to turn your back on me and race away. And there
I am. Alone, panting, inches from having caught you.

I understand.

There are places to go, people to see. No time to waste on a petty
young girl who is constantly late. My needs are second to your
demands. Frustrating it is, though.

The world -- your world -- not revolving around mine.

Your constant traveling, millions of faces, back and forth, and still
no permanent destination. And I am simply one with the masses. You see
me and don't care, I am just like everyone else. Still panting, now
waiting, knowing eventually you'll return.

You'll be on time, of course, and I'll be late.
©2005-2009 ~Elf-Prosetry
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Author's Comments

Written: January 18(ish), 2005

This is another Writing213 assignment. We had to write about an object or event in prose form and then (A) break it down into very short lines and (B) break it down into long expansive lines.

This is my long-lined piece. The short-lined piece is in my scraps if you wanna see it: [link]

I liked the feel of the long lines better. It kind of leans toward prose poetry in format, which I'm still developing an opinion on and am very new at.

Anyways, this piece is about Max, the Portland light rail train thingy that goes by every 10-15ish minutes. Since I ride it everyday, it seemed like an appropriate subject to use. Max is very much personified, but you'll notice that right away.

Blah blah blah - onto the poetry.

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Image © Someone who isn't me

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:iconinmyroom:
this is wonderful. i can relate to it so much. it reminds me of my most recent piece i submitted 'absent'.
:iconelf-prosetry:
I'm glad you enjoyed it, I'll have to check out your page soon.

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Prose + Poetry = Prosetry. Aren't I just so clever.... :-þ
:iconakiko-writings:
Ah... oh so true about Max. Being from Salem and visiting Portland quite a few times. I know about Max or as my 3 year old niece calls it "Ting Ting" x3 Because of the quality, memories, and sheer beautifulness this poem has. It has to be faved. I mean, its not something I can enitrely relate with (since I've never missed the Max but I have missed a bus quite a few times in my home town XD)

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:iconelf-prosetry:
Nice, I have friends going to school in Salem. And I'm transferring to OSU this year, so I won't be terribly far from you in Corvallis. :-þ

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Prose + Poetry = Prosetry. Aren't I just so clever.... :-þ
:iconelf-prosetry:
Scratch that previous comment, I forgot you're in Thailand now, haha.

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Prose + Poetry = Prosetry. Aren't I just so clever.... :-þ
:iconakiko-writings:
What school in Salem? I'm looking at going to Art Institute of Portland, PSU, or Pacific University in two years. I'm in Thailand right now and will be going to Chemeketa when I get back for a year.

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I went to PSU for a year, but I'm going to OSU this year. (It has a better art program than PSU, btw, though Bill LePore is an AWESOME teacher, so make sure you get him if you go to PSU.)

Uhmm.. I have some friends at Willamette and at Western Baptist (which is now called something else that starts with a "C" but I can't recall what it is).

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Prose + Poetry = Prosetry. Aren't I just so clever.... :-þ
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Oh yeah, Western Baptist changed their name! I know the head music director there.... John Bartch. :x Awesome as hell guy. And thanks. I'm looking into AIP and Pacific more than anything right now. Digital photography I'm thinking.

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